姓名：杨同学
DearBaker,
Yourexceptionallywell-writtenessaygivesmesomuchjoyandwarmth.It’sanoutstandingachievement!Pleaseacceptmyheartfeltcongratulations.
Listeningtotheteacher’svoiceofreadingyouressay,Ilaughedwithopen-heartedenjoyment.Itwasveryhumorous.ItremindedmeofthehappytimeIspentwithmydearfamilyandfriends.Vividmemoriescamefloodingbackofthemomentwhenmyyoungerbrotherfirstcalledme“sister”.AndalsothemomentwhenIreceivedtheadmittedoftheBUPT,ourwholefamilyscreamedout--Itwasreallyagreatexperiencetoreadyouressay.Inmyopinion,IagreewithMr.Fleagle’scommentsonyouressay--it’softheveryessenceoftheessay.Youressayexpressedwhatyouwantedtosayinyourdeepheart,whichisoneoftheessentialreasonwhywewriteanessay.Weshouldappreciateeveryopportunitywearegoingtohavebecausethisisnotonlyachanceforustopracticeourwriting,butalsoachanceforustolistentothesoundscomingfromourdeepheart.Soweoughttotreasureeveryopportunityofwritinganessay.
Eventually,congratulationsonyourfantasticworkagain.Thankyouforbringingdelighttousandlettingmerelivethememorabletime.
Yours,Dinah.
学校：北京邮电大学
分数：88
【评语】
文章行文简洁而流畅。几乎没有语法错误。找不到中式英语的印迹。
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